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"If at first you don't succeed" divide up into shorter sentences.

I am not averse to tinkling out the commas myself in ET, as I am not allowed to do it in professional writing. But the above sentence is a comma too far; especially after 'accepted'

You can't be me, I'm taken

by Sven Triloqvist on Mon Sep 25th, 2006 at 06:24:00 PM EST
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Yes, too many staccato clauses and too many commas. The question is where to cut to make two separate sentences.

Those whom the Gods wish to destroy They first make mad. -- Euripides
by Migeru (migeru at eurotrib dot com) on Mon Sep 25th, 2006 at 06:25:40 PM EST
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