A National Renewable Ammonia Architecture | 26 comments (26 topical, 0 editorial, 0 hidden)

Re: A National Renewable Ammonia Architecture (none / 1)

Excellent review. I would put a simpler summary at the top, to draw readers in, that states the critical problem succinctly and that a solution is to be described below.

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by Sven Triloqvist on Tue Dec 23rd, 2008 at 04:58:25 AM EST

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In Safari there is a large missing section between 'domestic production' and the table of owners...

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by Sven Triloqvist on Tue Dec 23rd, 2008 at 05:00:12 AM EST
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In Firefox there is a large missing section, too. Works fine on DailyKos, doesn't look so good here, on Bleeding Heartland, etc. I dunno what it is ...

by SacredCowTipper (sct@strandedwind.org) on Tue Dec 23rd, 2008 at 05:47:04 AM EST
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Is there missing information?

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by Sven Triloqvist on Tue Dec 23rd, 2008 at 06:15:33 AM EST
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Re: A National Renewable Ammonia Architecture (none / 0)

No, nothing missing, just a break between the table and the preceding text.

by SacredCowTipper (sct@strandedwind.org) on Tue Dec 23rd, 2008 at 09:29:56 AM EST
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Then, presumably, you have some stray html in there....

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by Sven Triloqvist on Tue Dec 23rd, 2008 at 09:39:31 AM EST
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Delete the carriage returns in the table, so its a solid block of html ... its just a bug in Scoop when bullet point lists and auto-formatting of hard returns interact.

Here, where the html is stored rather than the original diary source, just look for the string of <br> that were generated by mistake, and delete them.

I've been accused of being a Marxist, yet while Harpo's my favourite, it's Groucho I'm always quoting. Odd, that.

by BruceMcF (agila61 at netscape dot net) on Tue Dec 23rd, 2008 at 05:16:19 PM EST
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ditto for me in Safari. (none / 0)

by borkitekt on Tue Dec 23rd, 2008 at 07:20:36 AM EST
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Re: A National Renewable Ammonia Architecture (none / 0)

Hey! Just what several of us said at Agent Orange.

If the argument (and even if it is presented as a report, it is in reality an argument) can be boiled down to three main points, those can be presented in a single coherent introductory paragraph that can give the reader a mental map. Something along the line of:

"Why the concern with sustainable, renewable ammonia production? __point_1_. _point_2_. _point_3__."

... would be a tremendous help.

I've been accused of being a Marxist, yet while Harpo's my favourite, it's Groucho I'm always quoting. Odd, that.

by BruceMcF (agila61 at netscape dot net) on Tue Dec 23rd, 2008 at 01:14:31 PM EST
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Oh, yes, I am glad for feedback. I'm so deep into this stuff that even when I'm trying to take a step back I assume much context that no one except a corn state agronomist would have.

by SacredCowTipper (sct@strandedwind.org) on Tue Dec 23rd, 2008 at 04:53:32 PM EST
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I'd be happy to give a rough critique of the text as it stands from the point of view of both as an average joe for whom this stuff is totally new, and as a professional copywriter.

It seems to be something worth the time of cooperating on, to ensure your message gets the best possible chance of changing things.

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by Sven Triloqvist on Tue Dec 23rd, 2008 at 05:00:01 PM EST
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