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Hey! Just what several of us said at Agent Orange.

If the argument (and even if it is presented as a report, it is in reality an argument) can be boiled down to three main points, those can be presented in a single coherent introductory paragraph that can give the reader a mental map. Something along the line of:

"Why the concern with sustainable, renewable ammonia production? __point_1_. _point_2_. _point_3__."

... would be a tremendous help.

I've been accused of being a Marxist, yet while Harpo's my favourite, it's Groucho I'm always quoting. Odd, that.

by BruceMcF (agila61 at netscape dot net) on Tue Dec 23rd, 2008 at 01:14:31 PM EST
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 Oh, yes, I am glad for feedback. I'm so deep into this stuff that even when I'm trying to take a step back I assume much context that no one except a corn state agronomist would have.
by SacredCowTipper (sct@strandedwind.org) on Tue Dec 23rd, 2008 at 04:53:32 PM EST
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I'd be happy to give a rough critique of the text as it stands from the point of view of both as an average joe for whom this stuff is totally new, and as a professional copywriter.

It seems to be something worth the time of cooperating on, to ensure your message gets the best possible chance of changing things.

You can't be me, I'm taken

by Sven Triloqvist on Tue Dec 23rd, 2008 at 05:00:01 PM EST
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